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One space return after title
Second paragraph first line Remove simple 
Second paragraph 5th line Add comma  after reading 

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If can don’t hyphenate water 

As the brothers were walking to the surf one morning m, they stopped to smell the plumeria blossoms 

Change physique to appearance 

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Add 

his name

Page 14. Please Add words 

Line 5.    had quietly

Line 8.    Magic Wishing Fish 

Line 11.    that the name 

Page 24.   add

bold, boisterous voices 

Don’t hyphenate braddahas 

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Add the word Magic  ( three places) line 1,5,7

Add the word - generous brothers take out generously 

Page 26 delete the last sentence 

Add this sentence instead 

Byaku Ban had for filled his promise, and within moments the Magic Wishing Fish quietly vanished into the deep-blue sea. 
Is this method working for you? I’ll keep going

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2. Take out phonogram
Add phonemic awareness 

5 Line three
Take out as and them

It should read 

successful it builds self confidence. Watch the light bulb go on, and celebrate with Aloha. 

e teaming,)     ( tracking,)
Page 30 second paragraph second sentence omit 

New sentence 

Look for books with one or two sentences on a page that has relevant content on your child’s  grade level. 

Page 30 second paragraph rewritten 

If you notice a visual challenge find books with larger print.
Look for books with one or two sentences on a page that has relevant content on your child’s  grade level. Schools and libraries have large print books. Also, the text in online books can be enlarged. Use a visual aid bookmark so the student sees one line at a time. 

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Don’t hyphenate ultimately 

6. Your child needs 10

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Integrated means both sides of the brain are working optimally together. 

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By Kristen Gagnon and Rex Dubiel Shanahan 

1. Have the students look at a vocabulary word and write …

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5. Beginning, middle,  

You need a topic sentence, at least three supporting detail sentences. Then one child writes the closing. 

8. Second sentence change the word help to assist. Change the word their to his/her

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3. Change annually to briskly 
4. Omit cooking and hiding
Add periods to all homophones sentences
Homophones line
blew / spelling error everywhere 
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Bored I was bored while sitting in the car all day. 

Beet we found a rotten beet in the garden last summer. 
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Omit the whole line 
Examples in the story are “be”….

Thing: omit fortune 

Possessive nouns 
Add 
Plural:  cats’ wishes, boats’ anchors

Pronouns delete 
Generic 
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All of these next edits are in book 3+
Same changes in cover, page 2, page 3 as other book. 
Page 10 capitalize Magic Wishing Fish ….and throughout this book 

Change the word ran into the word bumped

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Because of their kind actions the Magic Wishing Fish gave Brent and the braddahs three wishes! They started jumping up and down and waving their paws in the air. They were ready to make their wishes! 

What would you wish for if you had found the Magic Wishing Fish?

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4. Omit last sentence
5. Add comma after paper
8 engaged
10 lowercase keiki.  
Line 3 change their to his/her

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10 Remind him/her
Then when your child is ready, start reading again 

Neurogenesis means creating 

Omit they love trampolines 

Change us to like in the sentence …

Do it like we do

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Last sentence first paragraph 

The more words you know, the better you are at relating and connecting with people and books. 

Omit fortune 

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Breathing 

As long as you like.  We do each side for three deep breaths or longer. 

Page 23 at the end of calm down 

Do this for four to five minutes unhook, then to anchor in the calmness put your finger tips together for one minute.